Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent times, many families have both parents working. Some working parents think other family members
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can look after
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their
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,
whereas
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others feel
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centers
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offer
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better
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. In my opinion,
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childcare
children are
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centers
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is
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better than
grandparents
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to take
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care
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of
children
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because in
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childrecare
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childcare
child care
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centers
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there are qualified professionals namely, nurses,
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and education
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specialists, and
also
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childcare
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centers
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allowe
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allow
children
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to become more social. On the one hand, some feel the
grandparents
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can
prvoide
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provide
better
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for their grandchildren.
This
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is because
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have plenty
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of experiences
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to deal with
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,
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because they raised their
children
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in the past .
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if the
children
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cry
grandparents
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can know to make
children
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calm down.
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, if the
grandparents
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look after their grandchildren
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can contribute boosts the relationships among members family, because all members of
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the family
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share
responsibility
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the responsibility
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to
care
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for
children
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.
On the other hand
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, I would agree with those individuals who think that
childcare
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centers
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it better way to look after their
children
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.
To begin
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with,
childcare
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centers
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have qualified experts namely, nurses, doctors,
education
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and education
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specialists, which means
children
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are more likely to receive better
care
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than
grandparents
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.
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due
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to the fact that
,
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those professionals have high skills to cope with
children
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under any circumstances.
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, if the
children
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get
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nurses can provide better healthcare than those
grandparents
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.
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,
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childrecare
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childcare
children are
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centers
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centres
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give
children
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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to become more
scoial
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social
through
make
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relationships with
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a peer
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peer
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.
Consequently
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,
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childrecare
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childcare
children are
child care
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centers
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can help
children
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to become more open-mind to the world around them.
To sum up
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, in my perspective,
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childrecare
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childcare
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centers
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can provide
best
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the best
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care
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for
children
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than
grandparents
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because in
childcare
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centers
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centres
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there are qualified specialists,
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who provide
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provide
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a chance for
children
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to make relationships with other
children
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