Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today's era where everything is expensive, many couples agreed that they will both work to sustain the family's needs. A few parents think that their offspring will be taken care of properly by their family members, for ,instance the senior parents,

while

others believe that a childcare facility will be the best option. In

this

essay, I will try to discuss my opinion regarding

this

situation.

To begin

with, it is an undeniable fact that grandparents love their grandchildren more than their own children. You will be rest assured that they will be able to eat on time

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and be given the necessary things the children need and want. The kids will be safeguarded properly so that even the tiniest insect can't get into their skin. I am living proof of how my parents take care of my son, as I and my husband are both working.

On the contrary

, strength and endurance come with age. The power of the senior citizens will decrease in time so they won't be able to keep up with the youngster. Because of

this

, other people opted for a childcare centre that has different facilities and is governed by trained personnel. They are willing to spend money in these places in exchange for good services. It is

also

a good area for a child to learn independence and be away from a family member. To end, whilst a childcare centre is really a big help to lessen the burden of the grandparents, but still they provide the best quality care that the children need.

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