Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food.Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people.Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
We live in a world where music is one of the most important things in our lives. Therefore, it has a huge impact on every one of us. I will explain my point of view and my suggestions.
I hope that you are doing well. The purpose of writing this letter is to bring your attention to the matter of access garbage that is dumped into our local park located in the centre of our city.
My name is Nishi Prajapati from Brampton Canada. I am writing this letter to apprise you of a problem with the transport system, which is causing issues to not only the students commuting but especially the seniors as well. And I request you to look into this matter and do something to mitigate the problem as early as possible.
When talking about reducing criminal activities, there is an ongoing discussion on how effective the police street patrols are in reducing crime. I believe that there are three benefits of police patrols and some other practical ways to curb crime activities.
Some would argue that computers will be more powerful than individuals, while others are concerned about the bad results of them. While the power of computers will overtake the power of humans, I believe that they can help us in various aspects and improve our lives.