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Governments should spend money on railway rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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When it comes to spending government funds on different purposes, some
people
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 argue that countries should prioritize
railways
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 rather than
roads
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. I partly agree with
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 statement as they both bring advantages for
people
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 and the system. With regard to
roads
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, building and improving its infrastructures have many benefits.
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, not all places, especially remote ones, have access to
trains
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.
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,
people
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 can reach there only by
car
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 on the
roads
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. Take a place in a mountainous area
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, if a person intends to reach there, road expansions are more reasonable rather than
railways
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 with regard to the costs of building them.
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, driving and taking a trip by
car
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 is more comfortable than train.
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,
people
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 can stop wherever they want in order to take a rest.
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, travelling far away by
car
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 gives you the opportunity to stop by different cities on your way and take a nap. In terms of
railways
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, expanding them is more strategic and important for a government. Having railway expansion all around the country enables the military to reach frontiers in a shorter time rather than using a
car
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 or trucks. In fact, one of the most crucial features during World War II was having access to
trains
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 and moving soldiers throughout different frontiers.
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, using
trains
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 as a means of transportation reduces the exorbitant prices of transporting goods, especially between two countries. As an example, when a product is produced in Turkey and a company wants to export it to Iran, it will be more affordable for them to use
trains
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instead
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 of trucks. In conclusion, governments should decide between spending money on spreading out
railways
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 or
roads
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.
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 decision will be made on the benefits each can bring.
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