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In the furture, buses, cars and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside will be passengers. Do you think that advantages driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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 when vehicles will move on streets without human participation is not far. Soon passengers will be the only
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 in a
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 during the trip. In my opinion, the merits of
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 technology are more weighty and valuable than the demerits. I believe that
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 to work constantly and instant reaction in unexpected
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 occurrences plays
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 of replacing drivers with machines.
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, computers are significantly faster than
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 when it comes to
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. Well trained computer can not make
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mistakes
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 driving, control is based on strict rules and accurate analysis of
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 does not have emotions or thoughts that can distract during
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transportation
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driverless vehicles will reduce
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numbers
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road
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 incidents. That's why trust in
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 type of ride will gradually grow, appealing
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 customers and saving old ones.
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, it is important to notice that robots can not be tired or exhausted, they are capable of working without holidays and vacations. Whereby,
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 will be accessible around the clock regardless of the weather, time and state of
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. It will
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allows
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people
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 to move more rapidly and effectively because computing mechanisms can
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 passengers safely, without
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risk
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 of meeting with
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sleeping
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driver
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a
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road
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.
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 of trips will increase as fast as figures for satisfied clients and
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 bring more money to
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 creators.
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, with the introduction of driverless
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 world,
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 of positive changes will take effect.
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 innovation that will be useful for citizens and
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • autonomous vehicles
  • human error
  • traffic flow
  • congestion
  • advanced algorithms
  • mobility solutions
  • economic impact
  • fuel consumption
  • carbon emissions
  • environmental sustainability
  • over-reliance on technology
  • initial investment
  • infrastructure
  • legislation adjustments
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