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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems to increase the costs of fuels. Do agree or disagree?

#world #costs #fuels
Increasing the prices of fossil fuels
such
 as gas or diesel to reduce pollution is considered a good option.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 thought because it will boost inflation or only affect general working-class
people
. To start with,increasing the prices of fuels will result in inflation.
This
 is because all transportation vehicles(trucks and trains) run on
fuel
.Putting an extra tax on gas will make transportation expensive because owners of these vehicles have to waste extra money on
fuel
.
Therefore
,maintaining
this
 as a profitable business will make their owners to charges extra for every load.For making payments,dispatchers will charge more for transporting stuff which includes vegetables and fruits.In the end,it's local buyers who are going to pay extra money for
this
 approach.
Moreover
, middle-class
people
 will be affected by
this
 way.Every working-class person has their own vehicle which they use for daily commutes to work.Increasing the cost of
fuel
 will make their commute expensive.If the government makes
fuel
 expensive,
then
 they have to pay more out of their savings.
Hence
,they will not have savings which they can use to enjoy their life.
As a result
,
this
 will add an extra burden on their shoulders and will make their life harder.
Besides
,rich
people
 who can afford luxurious cars will not have any problem paying extra for
fuel
.
To conclude
,increasing the prices of
fuel
 is a bad idea because it will make everything expensive and will mainly affect working-class
people
.
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