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Some people believe that the best way to deal with heavy traffic in city centers is for privately owned cars to be banned, others however, think this is an unrealistic solution. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The issue of traffic congestion has become a common problem in different countries all over the world. Some
people
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 argue that it could be solved by restricting the use of private vehicles. Diametrically opposed to
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, other
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 think that adopting
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a threat to the thriving of those cities. I believe that I cannot approve of
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 extreme practice without the consideration of public transport.
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 with,
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 the increasing number of private automobiles,more and more
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 are able to choose to commute by car
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 of walking,bicycles and public bus.
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 is because private
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 are fully flexible and affordable.
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, many workplaces and business buildings have been built in the city centre, and
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 working in these workplaces have to go through the city centre using their
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 every workday.With the narrow streets,hustle and bustle commercial lanes, the city centre has more possibility to result in a traffic jam.
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,London has already introduced measures for banning private
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 in order to stop congestion.
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,many
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 have to live in the suburb which has a better living environment and lower housing prices.The private car is the main commuting method for them.
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 is because public transport tools cannot able to achieve their requirements,
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 as in terms of an adjustable timetable.Because if they choose to work by public bus ,they have to leave home early by sacrificing their sleeping time.
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, some parents living in China have to send their children to school during rush hour and
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 go to work .Without private
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 ,it will bring a lot of difficulty for them.
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 , it will cause a bad cycle for their job and life quality. In conclusion,
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 banning private
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 can ease traffic pressure thoroughly in some cities.
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,different governments should be combined with diversity management strategies to implement different plans in different countries.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant to the topic. Also, make sure to fully address both views in the discussion.
task achievement
Clearly present your opinion and provide a more comprehensive discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of banning private cars in city centers. Use specific examples to illustrate your points.
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