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In the near future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying to what extent do yo agree or disagree with this statement.

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There are common belief
such
 as printed materials newspapers, journals and books will completely lose their potential in
regards
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 a necessity in the future, as they will be replaced with online ones for free. I absolutely agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, advancements in technology
makes
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make
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 reading more convenient. Nowadays electronic devices like computers and phones become inseparable items as they made our lives much easier than in the past. On top of that, they
also
 continue improving and creating new features that will encourage our reading likelihood.
For instance
, my phone has an app which can read aloud any book and it is very useful as I am always busy with my work. With the help of my phone, I can listen to any book
while
 working.
Secondly
, access to the
internet
 allows online reading to be more suitable both financially and academic purposes. The
Internet
 has a huge impact on our lives and on the way how we read and consume information. Individuals do not need to search libraries and arxiv materials any more . Because everyone can now simply seek any book or reading knowledge from the
internet
 which is often free.
For example
, in my freshman year in the university, I struggled with finding an article for my daily studies from the library. Thanks to the
internet
 I eventually was able to find information that I looked for.
To conclude
, despite the fact that printed materials still have their potential I think that in the future we do not need them as they will replaced by new advanced devices.
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grammar
Work on reducing small errors in grammar and word choice, such as 'common belief such as,' which should be 'There is a common belief that' and 'regards a necessity,' which should be 'regards as a necessity.'
coherence
Enhance the coherence of the essay by ensuring smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs. For example, the transition between the first and second paragraphs can be made smoother by explicitly linking the ideas.
task response
Add more specific examples and elaborate a bit more on your main points to make your arguments even stronger. This would improve the comprehensiveness and relevance of your ideas.
structure
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.
support
Your main points are well-supported and relevant to the topic. The use of personal examples makes your argument more relatable and convincing.
logical
The arguments are logically arranged, making it easy for the reader to follow your line of thought.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital media
  • print media
  • tactile experience
  • environmentally friendly
  • growing popularity
  • historical and sentimental value
  • digital divide
  • access to online content
  • tangible
  • transition
  • subscription-based models
  • sustainability
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