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Universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #students #subjects
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It is argued that government is to be responsible for the choice of all
disciplines
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 that
students
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 study at the
university
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.
This
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 essay totally disagrees with
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 statement.
College
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 attendants should be given freedom in the selection of minor subjects. In many
countries
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students
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 do not have a vote when it comes to the topic of
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 they are to study
while
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 at
college
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. A lot of times
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 leads to
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disappointment in the whole educational system.
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 happened to a friend of mine who entered
Moscow
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 State
University
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 of Technology. He wanted to become an engineer and practice as much as possible during his years at
college
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. But as he had no choice of subjects, for the first two years of
university
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 he was forced to sit through safety lectures, getting no real work experience at all. Eventually, he lost all interest in the process and dropped out.
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, giving
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 attendants a variety of
disciplines
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 to choose from is positive and motivational. A great example of
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 is my elder sister who went to a
university
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 in South Korea.
Students
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 there are given a list of subjects they are eligible to attend, and
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 they simply apply for what is most interesting to them. My sister always treated studying
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Korean
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university
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 as a thrilling and exciting experience because she never had to morbidly sit through classes. Taking everything mentioned into consideration,
university
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students
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 should be given freedom in the choice of
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disciplines
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. Not having to attend pre-decided uninteresting lectures or seminars makes studying a much more pleasant experience.
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  • social balance
  • affirmative action
  • gender imbalances
  • meritocracy
  • gender quotas
  • gender stereotypes
  • career segregation
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