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Success is often measured in wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure for success? What makes a person successful?

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What stands out
while
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 gauging
success
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 is the amount of money and material possessions.
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, I am convinced that affluence is not a reliable barometer of
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 and a sense of satisfaction
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 self-consciousness are of greater importance from my standpoint. There are two main reasons why the concept of
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 cannot be measured by opulence.
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 with, wealth can be obtained effortlessly. To put it another way, if money is not reaped
of
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 hard work,
people
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 from high social strata should no longer be admired. Take well-off families who have bequeathed their inheritance to the next generation as an example; their familial financial wealth does not give their children’s
success
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 a seal of approval.
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, hardly can anyone deny the fact that some massive achievements in
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 yield a high level of return either too late or never, namely artists and scientists in the history of mankind.
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,
people
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 can achieve
success
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 by deriving great satisfaction
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 introspection. As for contentment, ones, irrespective of their financial status, can flourish, provided that they acquire expertise useful.
People
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 can hone skills giving them a competitive edge either in academic or professional fields. A lucid example of
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 is getting a job they have always dreamed of, thereby finding deep contentment in their
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.
People
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,
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, can obtain a better understanding of both themselves and the essence of
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 by working on their inner feelings, despite the whole world propelling them towards material
success
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, which is nothing but a shallow perception.
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, a person’s
success
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 seems to have no correlation with luxury items or plenty of money. Meanwhile, I strongly believe that those having a great understanding of who they are and trying to gain more satisfaction in their
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 are the
true
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 successful
people
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.
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