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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
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A chart is provided with some information about the way families in a special country spent their weekly income in the years 1968 and 2018. A glance at the chart reveals that almost all the categories of weekly expenditure experienced a reduction trend from the
year
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 2018, except for
food
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 clothing and footwear and personal
goods
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. Meanwhile, the percentage for household
goods
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 remained the same in both years. Analyzing the proportion of the money which families used in the
year
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 1968, highlights
food
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 as the major expenditure item with 35% of weekly income. It is
while
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, housing and clothing, and
footware
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footwear
 were in second
place
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 using only 10% of the money in the week. Spending money on leisure stands third in the ranking with almost 9%, just ahead of personal
goods
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, household
goods
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 and transport with the same percentage of almost 8%. The
last
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 item to be ranked was fueled and
power
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 which was just about 6% of all the expenditures in the week.
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, the
year
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 2018 experienced a different ranking, with leisure paint in first
place
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 with almost 22%, just ahead of the housing category with almost 19% in second
place
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, and
food
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 with almost 16% was the next. Transport and household
goods
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 ranked fourth and fifth with almost 14% and 8% respectively. It is
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 clothing and footwear were ranked sixth with 5%, just ahead of fuel and
power
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 and personal
goods
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 with almost 4%. On the whole, it is evident that
food
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 was the number one expenditure of the week in the
year
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 1968 and field and
power
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 were the least. As in the
year
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 2018 first
place
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 goes to leisure and fill and
power
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 holds the same record as the least used option with accompaniment of personal
goods
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, food, goods, place, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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