While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

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other people opinion that
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of studying they have to learn a useful craft.
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totally disagree with that statement as academic class guarantees a reliable future for the
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occupation.
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, each individual has a childhood dream
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been a doctor or policeman. these
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need highly qualified
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. and to be highly qualified the
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person
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can not get until he finishes his 7 years of academic
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he will get a certificate that allows him to work in that field. so
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totally disagree when people say the student can teach any qualification outer academic studies.
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, academic
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gives all students sufficient knowledge about the field
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student studies. ,
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academic educational
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provide extra courses about human resources and management.
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academic
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can guarantee work after graduation in high occupations.
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university of Agriculture in Egypt
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gives all students who studied
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it the opportunity to work in agriculture companies with long-term contracts and high wages. so that most students should go after academic educational
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, I admit that
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completely disagree with these craft
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as it does not give the individual enough information about the field he teaching as well it doesn't give the individual a trusted certificate which helps to find
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • skilled workers
  • vocational training
  • academic study
  • qualified
  • electricians
  • plumbers
  • technicians
  • hands-on experience
  • job market
  • infrastructure
  • economy
  • unemployment rates
  • consumer spending
  • educational paths
  • job satisfaction
  • societal resilience
  • versatile workforce
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