While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

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university for educational

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totally disagree with that statement as academic class guarantees a reliable future for the

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occupation.

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totally disagree when people say the student can teach any qualification outer academic studies.

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academic educational

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provide extra courses about human resources and management.

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university of Agriculture in Egypt

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gives all students who studied

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it the opportunity to work in agriculture companies with long-term contracts and high wages. so that most students should go after academic educational

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completely disagree with these craft

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