While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

argued that enormous pupil engages

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university for educational

study

,

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other people opinion that

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of studying they have to learn a useful craft.

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totally disagree with that statement as academic class guarantees a reliable future for the

person

as well a

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occupation.

firstly

, each individual has a childhood dream

such

been a doctor or policeman. these

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need highly qualified

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. and to be highly qualified the

person

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study

to get

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a kind of these

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. for ,example to be a doctor you should

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well about medicine at least 7 years.

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such

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person

can not get until he finishes his 7 years of academic

study

then

he will get a certificate that allows him to work in that field. so

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totally disagree when people say the student can teach any qualification outer academic studies.

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, academic

study

gives all students sufficient knowledge about the field

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student studies. ,

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academic educational

program

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provide extra courses about human resources and management.

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academic

study

can guarantee work after graduation in high occupations.

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university of Agriculture in Egypt

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gives all students who studied

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it the opportunity to work in agriculture companies with long-term contracts and high wages. so that most students should go after academic educational

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first.

to conclude

, I admit that

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completely disagree with these craft

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as it does not give the individual enough information about the field he teaching as well it doesn't give the individual a trusted certificate which helps to find

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