In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It's often argued that in some regions E-shopping has increased and as a

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result it has replaced the marketplace. I completely agree with

this

statement as digital shopping saves our

time

and our effort. First of all, I believe that e-shopping can save the customer

time

. ordering online products doesn't take much

time

such

as market store, the client can apply for any item from online platforms easily the process can take only 10 minutes.

For instance

, Shein is a familiar website for both gender clothes, that website provides the purchaser with high quality and speed delivery in 7 days .

This

is why an enormous number of people tend to purchase their products online.

Secondly

, online shopping saves people's efforts.

Moreover

, it provides variety among the products. On website-based retails the customer doesn’t need to visit it or move from his place to buy any

items

, it is

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very simple since the person doesn’t care about how far the spot of the wanted shop is or the transportation.

For instance

, Talabat is an Egyptian online market that includes all categories of foods and supermarket

items

this

application can deliver the product to the client whatever where his spot and with cheap delivery fees. So most people tend to buy their

items

through online shopping. To summarise, online shopping nowadays is very popular as

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assists the person to save

time

as well to keep his efforts

besides

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there are many

items

and varieties on it so the client can find what he or she needs easily.

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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remote areas
wide range of products
broad selection
price comparison
customer satisfaction
value for money
impact on local businesses
economic diversity
job losses
environmental implications
packaging waste
carbon emissions
carbon footprint
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In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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