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With the prevalence of the internet, museums are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 the advance of the
internet
,
people
 should not need to go
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museum
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museums
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 anymore. I personally agree with
this
 topic. In the following essay, I will discuss the reason why I agree with the statement with examples. First of all, There is a variety of information on the
Internet
. To be specific, On the
Internet
,
people
 can get access to watch various types of
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video
videos
.
Furthermore
, not only
people
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 watch history background
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 youtube but
also
people
 can find out history sites
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history
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 website which
also
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.
For example
, my friend used to go to
museum
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museums
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. One day, Since the
internet
 technology has been growing faster more and more, He was no longer to go
museums
 anymore because he can find information without going to
museums
.
As a result
,
through
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this
 situation,
people
 should not go to
museums
.
Secondly
, if
people
 do not go to
museums
, they can save money and commute time.
People
 have to make a plan for going to
museums
.
This
 can
be result
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 in much time and spending transportation money.
In addition
,
People
also
 feel tired and exhausted.
For example
, my brother planned to go to
museums
 with his friend.
However
, he
was
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no longer
to go
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 to
museums
 because he can find out enough knowledge through the
Internet
.
Finally
, he
caneled
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called
 to go to
museum
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the museum
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. In conclusion,
museums
 are no longer
to need to go
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needed
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 because there is
a diverse information
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 on the
Internet
 and
people
 can save time and money to
go
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going
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 there.
That is
, I
agree
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this
 topic.
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