The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000.

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000.
The bar chart illustrates the average daily minimum and maximum
emissions
of SO2 and N2O that caused air contamination in 4 cities (Los Angeles, Calcutta, Beijing, and
Mexico
City
) in the year 2000.
Overall
,
Mexico
City
was by far the most air-polluted
city
among the four cities. In Los Angeles, the quantity of SO2 emitted to the atmosphere was the lowest of all, with a minimum average of 2
microgram
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per m3 and a maximum average
five
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times as much, at 10
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. The Level of N20
emissions
was much higher with the maximum daily average level reaching up to more than 100
microgram
per m32. Meanwhile, the atmosphere in
Mexico
City
was severely polluted by SO2 and NO2
emissions
, with the daily minimum and maximum
emissions
average of 80 and 113
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per m3, respectively.
In contrast
to Los Angeles and
Mexico
City
, the amount of pollution caused by N2O in Calcutta and Beijing was less than that caused by SO2. The daily maximum average figures for SO2
was
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59
microgram
per m3 in Calcutta and 100
microgram
per m3 in Beijing,
while
both maximum average figures for NO2 were just over 50
microgram
per m3.
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