In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative deveolpment?

It is true that nowadays there is a direction of
people
changing their residences from the countryside to urban
areas
.
While
this
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trend
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has been noticed in some
countries
worldwide, I believe that
such
behaviour negatively
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impacts
these
countries
on a variety of levels. The growing number of
people
living in the
cities
has had many effects on
people
's lives. It has been a major challenge to
countries
' governments to
accomodate
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accommodate
for the highest ever number of
people
living in
cities
inspite
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in spite
of the improvements done in public
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sectures
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sectors
,
such
as building new schools , hospitals and residential
areas
.
Moreover
, the increasing number of cars would really
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a role in worsening the pollution in
cities
.
For instance
, in Cairo, a study was done
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to show the effect of the immigration of 3 million households from rural
areas
to Cairo. Shockingly,
this
study revealed that there was a significant rise in pollution levels 3 months after the studied movement happened. Similar studies have been done around the world and have all highlighted the possible consequences of the
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newly
noticed trend. I believe that
people
moving to urban
areas
from the
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countryside
have a negative effect on the former too.
Firstly
,
people
who live in rural
areas
usually work
in
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farms growing crops and breeding many animals which provide
such
as cows and chickens. Loss of
such
a vital sector of the
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will create shortages of important food items and the
countries
'
government
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governments
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would have to import these
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to fill the gap between production and consumption, a step that will negatively impact their economies.
Secondly
, city life is hectic and very busy
while
village life is more peaceful and calm,
therefore
,
people
moving to
cities
will notice a major change in their lifestyle. Unfortunately,
this
change is not for the
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better
, as it
usually
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accomanied
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accompanied
by increased
level
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of stress and anxiety among those who have moved. In conclusion,
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believe that
people
immigrating to
cities
have many drawbacks and
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action
need
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to be planned to decrease to ultimitly decrease and control
this
trend.
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