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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative deveolpment?

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It is true that nowadays there is a direction of
people
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 changing their residences from the countryside to urban
areas
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.
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this
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treand
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trend
that
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has been noticed in some
countries
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 worldwide, I believe that
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 behaviour negatively
imapacts
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impacts
 these
countries
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 on a variety of levels. The growing number of
people
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 living in the
cities
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 has had many effects on
people
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's lives. It has been a major challenge to
countries
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' governments to
accomodate
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accommodate
 for the highest ever number of
people
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 living in
cities
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inspite
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in spite
 of the improvements done in public
services
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sectures
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sectors
,
such
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 as building new schools , hospitals and residential
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.
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, the increasing number of cars would really
paly
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play
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 a role in worsening the pollution in
cities
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.
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, in Cairo, a study was done
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to show the effect of the immigration of 3 million households from rural
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 to Cairo. Shockingly,
this
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 study revealed that there was a significant rise in pollution levels 3 months after the studied movement happened. Similar studies have been done around the world and have all highlighted the possible consequences of the
newley
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newly
 noticed trend. I believe that
people
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 moving to urban
areas
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 from the
coutryside
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countryside
 have a negative effect on the former too.
Firstly
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,
people
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 who live in rural
areas
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 usually work
in
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 farms growing crops and breeding many animals which provide
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 as cows and chickens. Loss of
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 a vital sector of the
work force
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workforce
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 will create shortages of important food items and the
countries
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'
government
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governments
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would have to import these
produces
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 to fill the gap between production and consumption, a step that will negatively impact their economies.
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, city life is hectic and very busy
while
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 village life is more peaceful and calm,
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,
people
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 moving to
cities
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 will notice a major change in their lifestyle. Unfortunately,
this
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 change is not for the
bettter
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better
, as it
usually
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accomanied
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accompanied
 by increased
level
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levels
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 of stress and anxiety among those who have moved. In conclusion,
i
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 believe that
people
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 immigrating to
cities
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 have many drawbacks and
an
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action
need
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 to be planned to decrease to ultimitly decrease and control
this
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 trend.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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