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Nowadays, many people have to work longer hours, and they feel more stressed out than before. What are the reasons What can employers do to make their life easier?

#people #work #hours #employers #life
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In recent times, many individuals have
to
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work
 for longer
hours
, and they feel more stressed than previous generations. There are several reasons why many people
in
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these days
work
 for long
hours
 including,
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 demand
of
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for
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work
,
availability
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the availability
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 of
technology
,
however
, there are some measures
can
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that can
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taken
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be taken
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 by
employers
 to
adressing
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addressing
this
 issue namely,
reduce
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reducing
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 the number of
work
hours
,
employers
 should not
contact
 with their
employees
 out of
official
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an official
the official
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time
of
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work
. On the one hand, the primary reason why people
work
 for long
hours
 nowadays is
increase
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to increase
increasing
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 the demand at
work
. To illustrate,
the
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companies force their
employees
 to
work
 for long
hours
 in order to
increase
 the
producitivity
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productivity
 among their
employees
.
This
 is because the job market
in
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these days become more competitive and every company compete to provide
a better services
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a better service
better services
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 for their
expect
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expected
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 customers.
Availability
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The availability
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of
technology
 is another reason why people
work
 for long
hours
in
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apply
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these days. The
due to
 the fact that
employers
 can
contact
with
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their workers via
technology
 namely,
computer
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computers
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,
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and smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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, which
this
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can put a lot of pressure
in
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on
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 workers.
For example
, some
employers
contact
 via
technology
 with their workers during late
time
 or their family
time
.
On the other hand
, there are some measures
can
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that can
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taken
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be taken
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 by
the
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apply
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employers
 to mitigate
this
 issue. The first effective solution,
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is the
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the
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that
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employers
 could introduce
policy
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a policy
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 in order to minimize
work
hours
.
For instance
, in Saudi
Arabia
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,Arabia
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 the maximum working
hours
 for all
employees
 is 48
hours
.
The
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employers
 should not
contact
with
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apply
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their
employees
out
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outside
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 of
official
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an official
the official
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time
of
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off
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work
, which
this
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apply
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can help
employees
 to stay away
for
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from
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 their jobs.
Conseqently
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Consequently
,
employees
 will have enough
time
 to
relaxation
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relax
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 and stay with their families.
To sum up
, There are different reasons why many individuals in In recent times for long
hours
 including,
increase
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an increase
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 the
responsbility
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responsibility
of
work
, availability of
technology
,
however
, there are some solutions
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that
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can
taken
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be taken
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 by
employers
 to tackle
this
 problem namely,
minimize
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minimising
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 the
work
hours
,
employers
 should not
contact
 with their
employees
 out of
official
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an official
the official
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time
 of
work
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job market
  • higher expectations
  • pressure
  • constant connectivity
  • economic instability
  • work-life balance
  • demanding job roles
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • flexible working hours
  • wellness programs
  • stress management
  • mental health support
  • regular breaks
  • vacation time
  • burnout
  • positive work environment
  • team-building activities
  • open communication
  • career development
  • skill enhancement
  • employee morale
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