The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The given diagram illustrates the progress by which
sugar
is produced. Overall
, it is apparent that there are a total of seven stages in this
way, commencing with growing sugar
canes in fields and culminating in drying and cooling sugar
in the bowl.
The process initiates with growing sugarcane in fields for 1-1.5 years to harvest. These matured sugar
canes are cut into two types, one is cut by giant machines and put harvest into the tank, and another farmer is cut them one by one with a knife. The next stage is crushing sugarcane to juice through the crushing machine.
In the fourth stage of the procedure, these sugar
juice are purified by a limestone filter which applies heat to a large bowl to evaporate the moisture. As the liquid reduces, the sugar
water transforms into syrup by boiling down. After that, separate sugar
crystals from syrup with centrifuging machines. Finally
, the process concludes with dehydrating and cooling in a huge tank.Submitted by hic.lapin.1116 on
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