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International community should act immediately to encourage countries to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels, such as oil and gas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Indeed, some people
suggests
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 that international organisations should give
strongly
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 advocations in
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change
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 the consumption habits of fossil
fuels
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 for their numbers. In my
views
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, I
am partly agree
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 that the
community
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 platform should positively set a list of advice and rule to decline
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trend
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 for traditional
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. For international organisations, one duty is to set a communication platform to internationally
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 one particular event when it will
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 a toll on
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 global,
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 decrease
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pollutions
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sustainably
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 economic development.
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, reduced demand
of
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 traditional nature
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are
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also
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 a
directly
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 action to protect
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environment
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 for international organisations. The reason is that these kinds of
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 will
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 too
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damage
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 includes too much carbon dioxide and other different materials
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 discharged, and that will affect the multiple changes of climate and bad health conditions for human
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.
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, the international
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 should encourage their numbers to reduce the need
of
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 traditional
fuels
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.
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,
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economic problems will be caused if
international
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community
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 merely advocate
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energy
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 resources that their numbers used to
ultilise
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utilise
. Even though it is uncommon awareness that to
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energy
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 structure, it is
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between
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old and new. For some particular industry
field
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, it can be a better choice to consume nature resources, caused they have some features in clearer and healthier for the
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 as electricity cars.
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 others point out that it must be taken bad impact on the efficiency of
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manufacture
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 process, leading to fewer profits will be acquired by workers and factories. In summary, I
am partly agree
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 that
international
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community
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 should take certain suggestions about the
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change
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 habit of
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fuels
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 consumption,
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 its a responsibility for these kinds of
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 to protect the whole world and human beings.
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 these organizations
also
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 should
combination
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 internationally and together to solve the critical
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environment
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 problem.
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