It is generally accepted that exercise is good for children and teenagers. therefore physical education and sports should be compulsory for all students in all schools. what do you think.

In recent years,whether in all schools should be compulsory for all
students
who study physical
education
and
sports
or not has caused
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controversy.
although
this
trend is
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not
without disadvantages will be far
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shadow. On the one hand, making physical
education
and
sports
compulsory for all
students
in all
school
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has several reasons.
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restrict, the
students
participate in these activities to deal with the lessons and school. Because they do not really care about it.
second,
the
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of
students
spend
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their time
on
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studying.
this
means that they
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into their homework than these activities.
On the other hand
,
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believe that it is more beneficial for outdoor activities like
sports
or physical
education
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us have a healthy lifestyle. in fact, if you tend to play professional a sport, you must follow a healthy diet and stop eating fast food. so physical
education
is the best way to help
students
who
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avoid health problems related to sugarcane or obesity.
second,
the lesson about
sports
also
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us the discipline and responsibilities.
this
means that
,
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these subjects have related to the fields of practising
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patiention
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patient
attention
and discipline.
for example
,
according to
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in
america
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, 2010,
the
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children and teenagers play
sports
which be higher patient and
discipline
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tha
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than
the
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people
do
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not play. In conclusion, with the convincing
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argument above should
be make
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compulsory
sports
in
the
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schools. by considering all pros and cons.
i
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think the
goverment
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government
will make
the
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good decisions to solve
this
problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical health
  • mental well-being
  • cardiovascular fitness
  • muscular strength
  • coordination
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • lifelong habit
  • academic performance
  • concentration
  • childhood obesity
  • active lifestyle
  • compulsory
  • equal opportunities
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