The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates several steps of how the procedure of recycling aluminium cans is carried out.
It is clear that
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there are 11 main stages in
this
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6-week process, starting with getting waste from the trash bins and ending with the final products as new cans being used. As can be seen, during the first stage, the unused objects are delivered to the factory by trucks. After being deposited there, they are rinsed with water and
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pulverized carefully in a crushing machine.
Next,
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the process is kept conducting in the factory as the crushed things are cleansed for the second time with some special chemicals to remove the left dirt. Once washed throughout, the mixture is heated under a high temperature by fire before becoming liquid. In the eighth step, the liquid is moulded in the moulds to form an appropriate shape and
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they are put on the weight to check how heavy they are.
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, those are brought to the roller for rolling and the products are
finally
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finished as the new cans are produced.
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