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The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of
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inhabitant in four different Southeast Asia countries living in urban
area
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areas
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 between 1970 and 2020, with
forecast
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forecasts
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 for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the
population
 of people living in
cities
 in all countries will be predicted to
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rise with Malaysia is the most inhabitants living in
cities
. Meanwhile,
thailand
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Thailand
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 was the least
population
 who live in the
cities
. Looking at the information in more detail, it started at around 32% and 30%
Filipinos
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 and Malaysian live in
cities
 respectively. Meanwhile, individuals who live in the
cities
 in Thailand and Indonesia were lower at just under 20% and approximately 14% respectively. The figure of Malaysian who
live
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 in
cities
 had a
significat
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significant
 increase to
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around
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 72% and it predicts to rise to just over 80%
at the end
 of
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.
Furthermore
, the
population
 of people
live
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living
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 in
cities
 fluctuated for
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40 years.
In
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 the end of the year
population
 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 who live in
cities
 was
aroound
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around
 50%. As regard
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Thailand and Indonesia, Indonesian who live in
cities
 improved significantly
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 around 50% and it
also
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is also
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 forecast to rise
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 around 60%.
Finally
, around 4% of Thai will live in
cities
 in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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