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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to gibe longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views

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Today It is impossible to imagine modern life in peace.
Although
 the government does everything for
level
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 of
crime
diminishing
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, it still continues to be a huge problem in society,
that
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 makes inhabitants think about
this
 issue.
While
 the majority believe that prolongation of
prison
sentences
 is the best route to eradicate criminality, others argue that there are more effective ways to provide
unassailable
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 world. The extension of
imprisonments
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 is beneficial for several reasons.
To begin
 with, long
prison
sentences
 can cut down crimes in
psychological
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 way.
In other words
, prisoners who experienced long-term confinement face
with
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difficulties in returning to ordinary life. Usually,
this
 kind of people
are
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 not accepted by society,
what
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which
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 makes them think twice before committing the
crime
 again.
Moreover
,
long
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 stay in
a
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prison
 will stop a person
committing
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from committing
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the
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a
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crime
,
what
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which
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 can be useful in reducing
crime
 rates.
On the other hand
, someone
consider
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 that
prison
sentences
 are not so effective, arguing that prisoners live at the expense of the state, having appropriate life conditions,
for
example
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 three meals per day, shower and
furthermore
, criminals are able to get a job with salaries.
Thus
, inhabitants offer other ways to reduce criminality,
such
 as free community work and for
strict
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 crimes death penalty. People explain that free community work might be helpful for criminals to save their humanity by involving them in
a
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society,
instead
 of interacting with other criminals in
prison
. With all that being said, it is possible to say, that both
prolongation
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prison
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of prison
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sentences
 and
integration
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the integration
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new
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of new
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 ways for reducing crimes each has own advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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