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Some people think that animals should be kept in men-made cells. What are the disadvantages of keeping animal in zoo?

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Keeping
animals
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 in cages is believed by some people, and I think, it has some disadvantages to
animals
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 especially when keeping them in zoos.
However
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,
animals
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 should be lived in
wildlife
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 in nature, but unfortunately, some people tend to keep them in a cage at their homes or in bigger societies like
Zoo
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. Actually, their selfishness will be so harmful to
animals
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. So, it has some disadvantages,
firstly
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, keeping them in the
Zoo
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 will be a barrier to the natural activity that they could do if live in nature freely. As you know, all
animals
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 have activity without any restriction on their
wildlife
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, but when we force them to live in zoos, we undoubtedly endangered their
wildlife
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 and habitat.
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, ecosystems depend on some factors, the main of them living predators and prey in a common habitat. So, keeping one of them in the
Zoo
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 is morally wrong, it will be true, regardless of establishing the best conditions for
animals
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 in the
Zoo
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.
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, the
zoo
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 is a jail for
animals
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, that after a long time led to their patience or death, because of faring their natural habitat. On the one hand, we should have sufficient information about
animals
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' lifestyles especially، wild
animals
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 and the consequences of keeping them on their survival.
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, their habits in hunting and their tendency to choose their hunt. Actually, lack of correct knowledge about it causes endangering them. So, when we cannot provide a suitable space like their real
wildlife
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, so certainly, we should avoid imprisoning them in the
Zoo
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. In conclusion, imprisoning
animals
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 in the
Zoo
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 is not moral because of not considered their natural right, that to my mind, it have many disadvantages for their survival and endangered ecosystem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Confinement
  • Zoochosis
  • Natural habitat
  • Ethical implications
  • Artificial environments
  • Distorted understanding
  • Conservation
  • Habitat destruction
  • Inbreeding
  • Genetic diversity
  • Intrinsic rights
  • Species endangerment
  • Mental health
  • Inadequate conditions
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