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An increasing number of young people are traveling overseas to study . is this positive or negative development

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 no doubt that these days more and more students are
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preferring
 to study
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 of their countries
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, there are two different opinions people decided to consider
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separately
,
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 is with evolution and the other is not . On the first hand, many individuals believe in the idea of sending their boys or girls
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univrsities
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universities
 which are far from their
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, so that will aid them
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 several sides through their lives.
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,
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 of the best things that may the young students learn from studying
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 is to hold the responsibility by himself or herself without depending on someone else , that will
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 them fastly and gently . another advantage they might come with
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is being more clever ,
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intelligent
 and hard to be
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cheated
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 because sundry of researches confirmed that learning more than
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 the person to be
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smarter and have the ability
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 with
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 number of various kinds of personalities . On the
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 of families do not accept to let their younger members travel abroad ,
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 of their reasons is that they must
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be aware before they go outside, and some
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religious
 parents prefer to make sure
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 their
teenagers
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 religion which
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is an important part
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 them . In conclusion , after
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careful analysis , I believe
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that
 studying in another place long
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 from my home is a perfect choice and good development for some
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governments
 and international collages
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the students are not conscious enough
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 I do not recommend them to
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travel
 abroad by themselves.

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