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The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.

The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
This
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 map depicts the
town
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centre
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 in its current form and the proposed expansion .It is clear from the graph that there are several changes that are planned to make .The most noticeable change is making a dual carriageway,which will be an important addition to make the access to
town
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centre
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 easier.
According to
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 what is shown, the main road will be demolished and become for pedestrians only which is located above the shops .
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,more facilities will be added
such
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 as a bus station,shopping
centre
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,car park and new housing added
that is
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 situated in the northeast of the Islip
town
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centre
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.The housing located in the
centre
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 of
town
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 will be moved to the southwest ,there are some places that remain the same like the school and shops .
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addition
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 the size of the park will be smaller than the old one

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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