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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#group #students #classroom #home
There are several differences between classroom and
distance
education
.
While
 some people believe traditional
education
 is more beneficial, I believe online
education
 is better than
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 one for several reasons. One of these reasons is
distance
lessons
 are time savers.
While
 most
of
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the
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students
 have to spend most of their time on the roads in classroom
education
, the modern type of
education
 gives them an opportunity to finish their
lessons
 without leaving their homes.
However
, online
education
 not only gives
students
 more additional time
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 but
also
 helps them to decrease additional travel costs which they can use that money for their studies.
For example
, some online
education
students
 use their cash to buy online courses to increase their knowledge
instead
 of wasting it on roads. Another reason why I believe
distance
education
 has more advantages is freedom. In my opinion, most of the
students
 feel more comfortable in their homes which
this
 situation affects their productivity.
However
, a comfortable place not only increases their responsibility but
also
 can help them to concentrate on their
lessons
 more because
students
 can access whatever they want easily.
For example
,
students
 who join their online
lessons
 from their own room could use the advantage of silence and focus on their studies and
as a
result
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 they can get great marks in the final exams. In conclusion, the advantages that online
education
 could create for
students
 are more than classroom
education
 and
this
 is the reason why I believe
distance
education
 is more beneficial.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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