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Write an essay for your tutor discussing two of the ways in your notes. You should explain which way is more effective in motivating children to do regular exercise and provide reasons to support your opinion. You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

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Regular physical activity is vital for humans and helps us stay healthy both physically and mentally,
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, as the years go by, we can notice young children being less and less active, and having a more passive routine. In
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, there could be communal facilities in which volunteers coach the neighbourhood’s kids and impart health classes, teaching them from a young age how their body works or how to stretch properly to avoid injuries.
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, a bigger variety of activities in those facilities would be more inclusive and it would surely motivate them to try out more sports
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 until they find one they are passionate about.
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, a good parental example is absolutely indispensable, since kids tend to imitate the adults around them.
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, if they are taught since they are born that exercise is important they will want to engage in these hobbies, and it will break unhealthy habits like oversleeping or excessive phone usage, and strengthen the family bond. Parents should be responsible for their offspring’s relationships with the sport. On the whole, even though both of these options would surely encourage kids to practice On the whole, even though both of these options would surely encourage to practice exercise regularly, in my opinion, government funding is the way
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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