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Some people think that increasing the number of police officers on the street is the only effective way to reduce crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued by
people
 , that the number of police
officers
 working on the street is the only effective way to reduce
crimes
 . I strongly believe
this
 statement as the majority of
the
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crimes
 happen on the street .
Firstly
 , a huge number of
crimes
 happen in the city,
this
 is because of the lack of police
officers
, Offenders use
this
 as an advantage and strike at innocent
people
 ,
for instance
, it's easy for a gold snatcher to snatch chains from the public if there
is
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are
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 no
officers
 to prevent
this
 from happening,
moreover
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 it's not possible for one or two
officers
 to prevent
this
 from happening as they would be outnumbered by the lawbreakers .
Secondly
, more
officers
 patrolling
on
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the streets would have a significant decrease in
crimes
 ,
additionally
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this
 would help
people
 feel more comfortable
at
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there cites
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their cities
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 and homes,
moreover
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 it's the responsibility of the government to ensure the safety of their
people
 . In conclusion , there might be different ways to reduce
crimes
,
however
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 it would not benefit the
people
 .
therefore
, I believe that the only necessary action needed to reduce
crimes
 is by increasing police power on the streets .
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