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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of the time on school studies. Other believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, it is common to hear some different arguments with regard to how many schoolchildren's ages should be.
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 it is sometimes thought that children have to enrol in schools at a very
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 to concentrate on only lessons, I consider that by playing with their peers, young children will be more productive members of society. One of the main reasons why
kids
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 are considered to start
school
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 earlier is that it can put them one step ahead of their peers. They are more likely to be more mature than their peers,
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, these
kids
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 can realize that their sole aim should be concentrated on their lessons and any other distractive hobbies thrown away from an early
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. By enrolling in schools from an early
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, they will get a chance to take a year out between high
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 and university sessions,
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 some. In Shaki, students tend to start
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 very early and they can take a gap year to be engrossed in walking different local cities.
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, pupils have got a lot of benefits given above by going to
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 and acquiring knowledge early, it can be considered from the opposite angle. I believe that
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 will have a chance to communicate and play some games with other children,
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, these games can help to develop the left side of the brain and improve their soft skills,
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 as communication and self-reliance.
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, they can make a lot of childhood friends
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 getting on well with many people and they will build a strong bond with them in future. In 2002, scholars researched that childhood friendships are more long-lasting and these people were more likely to demonstrate high-quality features and traits in their career paths. In conclusion,
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 some people argue that offspring have to start academy life at a very early
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, I totally believe that
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 have to be given an opportunity to make a lot of childhood friends
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 they can gain knowledge about initial human relations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Intellectual growth
  • Structured learning environment
  • Discipline
  • Focus
  • Social skills
  • Emotional regulation
  • Conflict resolution
  • Creativity
  • Imagination
  • Holistic development
  • Play-based learning
  • Burnout
  • Holistic approach
  • Specialized subjects
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