The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from particular store between 2002 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from particular store between 2002 and 2011 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart demonstrates the
overall
amount of different
sales
and rentals of films over the period 2002 to 2011 . That statistic in general shows how film rentals decrease
while
sales
, especially of DVD formats rise during the designed period In 2002 the higher tendency was to rent movies from special stores in summary almost by 200
thousand
per year.
However
, in the next
years
up to ,2011 the number of rental films started to fall down close to 60
thousand
annually. In the same ,period dvd disks had a lower point than VHS
sales
in 2002 and noticeably lower than rentals Despite that fact, for the next several
years
the number of DVD
sales
got quite a jump from less than 50.000 up to 200.000 and in 2007 broke the hit by getting over 200
thousand
sold films per year.
This
number is taped off during the next
years
. An alternate situation is seen with VHS type of
sales
that started from almost 90
thousand
and
then
consistently decreased to quite more than 10
thousand
and to the year 2006 just disappeared. The new type of dales
as
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a Blu- ray appeared in 2007 and steadily rises over four
years
to the amount of 15
thousand
annually.
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