You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing in with regards to
request
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for a different room for me to stay.
Currently
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I am staying at block 421 on the 4th floor which is opposite the basketball court. I have a
room- mate
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who is a
first year
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student in our college and he
has
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moved in 3 months ago. After his moving in, I regret to mention
this
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but I was unable to focus on my
work
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due to
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many reasons.
Firstly
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, I do have
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work from home
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arrangement
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on certain days in
a
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week and I always have kept my
room- mate
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in
loop
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.
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, he will bring in his friends to
chit- chat
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and play games together.
This
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noise has been disruptive for me to interact during my online meetings.
Secondly
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, he likes to sleep early
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his college lessons in the morning and I have to
work
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online at late
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as my company do follow American timing.
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such
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work
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arrangement, I am unable to switch on the room lights for better lighting and I stick to an old table lamp. That
do
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affect my eyesight when I am online for quite some time. I am sure that he is still growing up to be a young adult and his hygiene is not up to standards. He tends to share my desk and sometimes
misplace
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my books or things
elsewhere
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. I do warn him to rectify his behavior but he is not making much improvement. So, I will be grateful if you could provide me
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single occupancy room that can boast a conducive environment to
work
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and stay.
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, I am flexible with rooms on any floor and sharing
bathroom
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will not be an issue for me too. I am looking forward to
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from you soon.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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