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The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.
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There are
a
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statistics
three
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 types of
law breaking
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 acts that happened in downtown
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Newport in
one-decade
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 bracket.
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, the crime rates of car theft and robbery did not change remarkably during
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period
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 of
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question ,
while
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 the rate of burglary dropped in
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period
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 there was marginal soar from 3400 to 3700 between 2003 and 2004. The
amount
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 of burglaries declined continuously in the bracket of 2004 to 2008. Eventually, it did not noticeably change until the end of
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period
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 so, it stood at just roughly 1300 in 2012.
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 the fluctuation of car theft did not remarkably change from 2003 until 2005 by about 2800
number of
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incidents, there was a significant decline in 2006 and stood at just about 2100.
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 trend remained until the
period
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of
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mentioned.
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, there was a margin fluctuation for the robbery in the
period
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 of mention so that, the maximal and minimal number of that did not exceed 900 and 500 respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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