Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you thing this is a positive or a negative development?
In modern times, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments
such
as traditional medicines and avoid visiting their usual doctor
. According to
my point of view , this
development has both positive and negative effects.In the subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss the reasons for my belief that urge me to think in this
way.
On the one hand, there are many positive effects of taking medicine
at home rather than visiting the doctor
. Firstly
, it saves time and people who live in rural areas do not need to travel for a long time to go to the hospital and also
get a fast recovery. For instance
, one of my grandmothers is well expert in preparing traditional medicine
. Many of my family members buy medicine
from her on a monthly basis for the common cold and fever.If anybody in their family is affected from
a cold and fever give Change preposition
by
this
type of medicine
for a speedy recovery.Furthermore
,having alternative medicine
in the home saves money as well because the entrance fee, as well as
the charging fee of the doctor
,as well as
the charging fee of the doctor
is
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On the other hand
, there are some negative effects such
as medicine
being made up of chemicals.For example
, I remember my grandfather bought medicine
for stomach pain from a shop without consulting the doctor
. After a few days, he suffered from severe stomach pain and he was rushed to the hospital. The doctor
told
he had a stomach ulcer for more than two months because of that Verb problem
said
medicine
it burst out and spread to other parts of his body. Moreover
, without ,knowledge one should not buy medicine
from the medical shop.
To sum up
, this
development has both pros and cons so it depends on the individual's interest. However
, if the disease is not cured within a few days by taking home remedies at that time a person should consult their doctor
before the disease gets worse.Submitted by niraikalirajan on
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