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Some students are of the opinion that online learning during the pandemic lockdowns was complete waste of time.

#students #pandemic #lockdowns #waste #time
It is the topic of e-learning that has been born
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 considerations.
While
 the benefits it has brought during the pandemic lockdowns cannot be deniable,
this
 essay subscribes to the statement of it
being
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 a waste of time. Online learning courses have the potential to affect students in a negative way. Students who studied online seem to be distracted easily and their work has
shown
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 to be inefficient in comparison with the ones
attended
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 physical
classroom
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. At the same time, there was
also
 a lack of interaction and participation in extracurricular activities.
This
 could lead to the development of laziness and obesity in
long
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 term
Furthermore
, to participate in a virtual classroom, an individual has to use a device and
by
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looking at it continuously could bring
mentally
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 tiredness and
eyes
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 problems.
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happen
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 in between
such
 as
device
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 being broken down or the unstable internet connection that took hours to repair during the lockdowns. In conclusion, the development of advanced technology has brought convenience to humans and e-learning is a prime example.
However
, it cannot replace traditional learning models as problems associated with web-based classes remain time-consuming.
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