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Some people believe that nowadays we havee too many choices. To what extent do you agree or dissagree with this statement?

#people #havee #choices #dissagree
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It is argued by some individuals that these days
people
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 have abundance
preferences
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of preferences
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.
This
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 reasons why the phenomenon is
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To begin
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 with, easy access to
information
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 is the main reason why individuals have too many choices nowadays. Social media like Instagram, Facebook, and Tik Tok are the sources that
used
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are used
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 by many
people
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 to access
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 conveniently. They only need to download social media apps
in
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 their phones.
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,
people
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 will look for the types of destinations in some places on Instagram, and the Instagram
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algorithm
 will bring
people
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 to
the
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 variety of recommended places.
Thus
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, the
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algorithm
 leads
people
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 to lots of alternatives on what places they look for.
In other words
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, the easier
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 is obtained, the more
people
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 have many options.
In addition
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, the advancement of
technology
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 is another fundamental factor for
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 issue. In
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recent years,
technology
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 launched
the
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type of payment tools or digital
payments
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 like OVO,
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, and Link Aja.
People
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 just scan bar
code
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codes
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 or QRIS to pay,
as a
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result
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 they just bring their devices to pay. Those
type
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types
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 of
payments
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 make
people
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 confuse because the benefits of digital
payments
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 offer.
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,
people
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 may get
price
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a price
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 reduction when they use OVO, and
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on
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 other
occasions
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people
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 prefer to use Link Aja because it offers
lot
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a lot
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 of points that can change into money.
Consequently
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,
people
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 have more than two
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 of
payments
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 because of the payment
technology
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.
To sum up
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, it is true that in
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 era humans have lots of preferences
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 the easy access
of
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information
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 and the advancement of
technology
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 in terms of digital payment.
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