In many countries, people increasingly talk about money such as how much they earn or how much they pay for things in their daily conversations.

In the present age,
people
pay much attention to
money
. In different countries all over the
world
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people
are interested in the amount of salary and the cost of
things
. It is questionable whether
this
trend provides more benefits than it has
bad
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influence. First of
all
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I want to answer the question
why
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such
conversations become more popular. There are multiple reasons for increasing talks about
money
in daily
life
. In ancient times
people
showed their power through their strength. Our ancestors conquered lands with strength, now you can buy lands. You can own expensive
things
and everyone will see your level of
life
and power. Another reason is decreasing interest in
life
,
people
become lazier and don’t want to spend time thinking about art, philosophy, and science. It’s easier to discuss material
things
.
However
, daily conversations about
money
lead to the person's frustration.
For instance
, two friends meet for dinner in a pleasant Italian restaurant somewhere on the Atlantic
ocean
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coast. They start comparing their incomes and luxury
things
such
as houses, cars, decorations,
jewellery
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and jewellery
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. Talks like
this
breeds jealousy, dissatisfaction with
things
they have. Unpleasant feelings begin in
people
's minds.
Thus
, it provides a negative influence on population
life
. On balance, I would assert that talks about
money
can have a positive reflection. Conversations can explain the way you want to go,
inspire
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dreams and goals. When
people
want to earn more
money
, they start to find opportunities.
Thus
discussions about
money
in society lead to a person's improvement. In its turn individual development leads to society development which is an important part of solving the world’s issues.
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