The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents the survey results, which identify the
reasons
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why
people
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moved to the capital city of a specific country.
Overall
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, the huge amount of
people
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moving to the capital city is about
employment
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.
Conversely
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, the
number
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of
people
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moving for the reason of
adventure
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is a small
number
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. The amount of
people
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with a reason to study has increased extremely over time. From 2000 to 2005, Moving for the purpose of
employment
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had risen extremely up to 85000.
Also
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, the
number
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of
people
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who move for studying increased enormously to almost 50000 in 2005.
By contrast
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, the
number
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of
people
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for
reasons
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of family and
adventure
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increased slightly in 2005, accounting for 15000 and 13000 in order. From 2005 to 2010, the
number
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of
people
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with
reasons
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for
employment
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and studying increased continuously to about 90000 and 55000 in order. The
number
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of
people
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moving for
adventure
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increased slightly and constantly to 15000 in 2010. Surprisingly, the
number
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of
people
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with
reasons
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of family and friends rose enormously to about 20000 in 2010. From 2010 to 2015, the
number
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of
people
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moving with
reasons
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of
employment
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turned down approximately 85000.
Also
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, the
number
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of those with
reasons
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to study rose to 85000 as well. The
number
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of
people
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with
reasons
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of family and
adventure
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remains stable, accounting for about 20000 and 15000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people, employment, number, adventure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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