The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph represents the survey results, which identify the
reasons
why
people
moved to the capital city of a specific country.
Overall
, the huge amount of
people
moving to the capital city is about
employment
.
Conversely
, the
number
of
people
moving for the reason of
adventure
is a small
number
. The amount of
people
with a reason to study has increased extremely over time. From 2000 to 2005, Moving for the purpose of
employment
had risen extremely up to 85000.
Also
, the
number
of
people
who move for studying increased enormously to almost 50000 in 2005.
By contrast
, the
number
of
people
for
reasons
of family and
adventure
increased slightly in 2005, accounting for 15000 and 13000 in order. From 2005 to 2010, the
number
of
people
with
reasons
for
employment
and studying increased continuously to about 90000 and 55000 in order. The
number
of
people
moving for
adventure
increased slightly and constantly to 15000 in 2010. Surprisingly, the
number
of
people
with
reasons
of family and friends rose enormously to about 20000 in 2010. From 2010 to 2015, the
number
of
people
moving with
reasons
of
employment
turned down approximately 85000.
Also
, the
number
of those with
reasons
to study rose to 85000 as well. The
number
of
people
with
reasons
of family and
adventure
remains stable, accounting for about 20000 and 15000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people, employment, number, adventure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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