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The graph below shows the percentage of students at a UK university who watched TV sports, drama and news programmes over a one-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of students at a UK university who watched TV sports, drama and news programmes over a one-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the
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 the percentages of
students
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 at a UK university who watched
TV
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 sports,
drama
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, and
news
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programs
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 throughout the
year
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 2008.
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 the graph shows that
sport
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tv
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 program is the most popular over the entire
year
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 compared to
drama
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 and
news
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program
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programs
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. In January, around half of the
students
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 (50%) were watching sports
programs
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, and
this
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 level remained constant until March. The
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then
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 steadily increased, reaching its peak in June at around 80%. Later, the
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 of
students
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 decreased to 40% in September and
then
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 progressively increased until the end of the
year
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. Contrastingly, in January, around three out of ten
students
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 (30%) were watching the
news
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,
while
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 nearly two out of ten
students
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 (18%) were engrossed in watching
drama
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TV
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programs
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. These proportions remained relatively stable until mid-April
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 when the
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 of
students
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 following the
news
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 began to decline gradually. Simultaneously, the
percentage
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 of
students
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 watching
drama
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TV
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programs
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 started to rise, reaching a peak of 22% and maintaining that level until the
year
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's end.
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, the
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 of
students
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 watching the
news
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 saw a progressive increase again from August onwards, culminating at 20% by the end of the
year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, tv, drama, news, programs, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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