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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the houses or building they live in. What are reasons for this? How can people research this?

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There is a growing number of people who start to care about the
history
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 of their
houses
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, flats or apartments in numerous nations nowadays. In the following essay, I will discuss what may contribute to
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 phenomenon and how people gain information about it.
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 with, there are several factors that have responsibility for
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society’s increasing
interests
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 in the
history
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 of the buildings where they live in.
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,
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house
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 plays an important role in maintaining us keeping away from
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in other words
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,
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 ensures our safety.
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, it is
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importance
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 for individuals to understand
that
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what
had
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happened in the past before they choose the
house
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 or flat that they are going to live in.
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, with the knowledge of their
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 and buildings, it is possible to make the residents
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be proud of their community and become willing to participate in
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decision
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,
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 and enhance a sense of community. As for the ways to gain
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insight into the research, the elderly and the Internet are the two main resources to get information. From the aspect of the old, they have experienced a lot of experiences, and
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 have a possibility to suffer from some accidents that happened several years ago. If people want to acquire the first information about the
house
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, building or accommodation, having an interview with
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the elderly
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 is a good manner. Searching on the Internet is another way to learn about
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history
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, and it is
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 an efficient way. In conclusion, knowing the
history
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 of our
houses
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 or buildings enables us to enforce
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 sense of community,
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, it can help
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society to be more careful to make a choice before buying
houses
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, flats or departments.
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