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Some people prefer to live in hot climate, while others like to live in cold climate.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Climate has a significant impact on
people
’s
lifestyle
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,
such
 as the way to
do
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exercise,
to
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take a trip and
to
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keep healthy. Some
people
 think that it is more comfortable to live in high
temperature
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temperatures
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,
while
 others suggest that cold
weather
 is more suitable for
people
 to live in. I personally prefer to live in a hotter environment, and in
this
 essay, I will make an explanation and discuss the two standpoints mentioned above.
To begin
 with, there are several advantages to
live
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 in
hot
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 climate. One benefit is that many outdoor activities. Take climbing, biking and jogging
for example
, these three exercises will be easier to do when the
weather
 is great, and thanks to the long daytime, those who take part in these activities may have a better sight
while
 doing them.
Secondly
, a higher heat often leads to a higher possibility to sweat. Admittedly, sweating may make
people
 smell disgusting and feel uncomfortable;
however
, as everyone knows, it is undoubtedly an efficient way to help our bodies burn
the
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unwanted fat.
According to
 the World Health Organization, those who sweat more could stay
in
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fit much easier since their sweat glands stay active most of the time.
On the other hand
, from the perspective of the proponents of cold
weather
, they will choose to live in a cooler region because of the reasons below.
Firstly
, the storage of food may be much easier since the temperature degree is suitable to keep them fresh.
Furthermore
, with a lower temperature degree, the world
become
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 quitter and make
people
 feel calm when working. In conclusion, despite the benefits of cold
weather
, I would like to stay in
hot
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a hot
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 climate region
instead
 because I am a lover of outdoor activities, and I can not stand wearing too many clothes at one time which may make me look fatter.
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