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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.
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the pie charts illustrate the percentage of using different mobile
phones'
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 features by adolescents in Africa from 2016 to 2019.
overall
, throughout the previous period shown, most teenagers frequently used their phones for social media.
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, phone calls
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 the lowest using function among the four main features during
this
 period. As mentioned before, just over 50% of cell phone
oweners
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owners
 used it
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 for scrolling on
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social networks between 2006 and 2019. Meanwhile, sending e-mail took
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second place with about 25% of
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proprtion
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proportion
 of teens
phones'
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phones
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 features users in 2016, but
then
 decreased significantly to 19% in 2019.
However
, taking photos and making
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fluctuated within three years. As we can see, digital camera
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 increased from 15% in 2016 and 2017 to 20% in 2019. In
comparsion
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comparison
withe
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with
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 phone calls which
was
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 popular
between
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 teenagers from 2016 to 2018, suddenly dropped
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until
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 5% in 2019.
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