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Nowadays, it is a common perception that a good command over English language is the key to success in any profession. However I am not in complete agreement with this idea for some significant reasons. This essay will explain why proficiency in English language alone can not intrigue a successful professional life with relevant examples.

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To begin
 with, the most important factor for one to succeed is undoubtedly the technical understanding of the concerned field, without which no one can actually survive in a job. Every job demands core technical skills, in some way or the other. Here language proficiency can surely be an additional advantage but not in
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, an essential condition all the time.
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, a staff nurse working in a hospital ICU
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 is expected to take care of the assigned patients for which the clinical knowledge and ability to rightfully interpret the prescription of the attending physician are the required qualities.
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 English communication,
although
 appreciable, is not that necessary as long as instructions are correctly comprehended. A nurse plays a pivotal role in taking care of critical patients and
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 precisely why she is expected to be adequately skilled at correctly interpreting
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 condition.
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 of a treating consultant is imperative, in
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, a nurse is quite often supposed to make tough decisions on her own,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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