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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does this shortage cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

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With the increasing of the population
nowaday
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, the need for clean
water
 is higher than ever. Despite that, many areas in the world still suffer from the lack of fresh
water
 to use.
This
 essay will discuss the cause and the way to solve the challenge. Primarily,
the
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water
 pollution is caused mostly by the trash dumping of the residents and the contaminated chemicals that are flushed away by the factories. Not only the cause of the garbage but
also
 the awareness of
people
 who always have a mindset that there will be cleaner to help them, but these activities will contribute significantly to the lack of fresh
water
 in every place and can easily damage daily life. To help reduce the problem, the main solution is to punish all the individuals and groups who dumped trash and chemicals into the
water
 resources, which will decrease the rate of
water
 pollution in
the
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society.
Then
 the government should help the
people
 by installing
the
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water
 filter in every household.
This
 will make every family access to fresh
water
 and no more worry about health when drinking contaminated
water
.
Also
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 the government should schedule filter changes every 6 months to retain
the
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fresh
water
to
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 all
the
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families.
Moreover
,
people
 should
also
 raise other awareness by telling the benefits of having fresh
water
 to the health of everyone. Or even set up a
fresh
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freshwater
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water
 station in the public which is easier to access
the
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clean
water
. In summary, the cause of
water
 shortage is mainly
about
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the
people
 and groups that pollute the sources and the main solution is to increase awareness and make more ways to help every
people
 access to the
cleaning
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water
.
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