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The following chart show the results of a British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.

The following chart show the results of a British survey taken in 2009 related to Housing preferences of UK people.
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The bar chart illustrates the data of UK citizens showing preferences for housing in 2009.
Overall
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Liverpool
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 and
London
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 inhabitants tended to choose
apartment
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apartments
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,
while
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 Terraced
Houses
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 were not popular.
In addition
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,
Manchester
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 dwellers were interested in Detached
Houses
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 and Semi-detached
houses
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. As can be seen from the given chart, the proportion of people choosing apartments in
Liverpool
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 was about 60%, twice as much as that of
London
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, and
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three times as high as that of
Manchester
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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, Terraced
Houses
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 witnessed an opposite pattern, in which the highest rate was recorded in
London
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, at approximately 20%, followed by just over 11% in
Manchester
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 and about 10% in
Liverpool
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. The figures for Semi-detached
houses
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 in
Manchester
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 and
London
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was
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 equal, at about 38%, as opposed to the data in
Liverpool
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 was 18%. Detached
Houses
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was
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also
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 popular in
Manchester
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, with 35%, followed by 25% in
London
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.
However
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, the percentage of
this
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 category was just about 15% in
Liverpool
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words liverpool, london, houses, manchester with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Housing preferences
  • Survey
  • Detached house
  • Terraced house
  • Flat/apartment
  • Urban
  • Rural
  • Demographics
  • Homeownership
  • Renting
  • Property prices
  • Economic factors
  • Life stage
  • Cultural attitudes
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