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The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011

The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011
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The table compares the
numbers
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 of people who cycled to work in twelve
areas
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 in the UK
from
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 2001 and 2011.
It is clear that
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 the proportion of Britain citizens, who commuted to their workplace by bicycle, increased significantly in various
areas
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 in the United Kingdom over the 10-year period. Inner
London
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 had by far the highest
numbers
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 of cyclists in both years. In 2001, around 43 thousand residents in Inner
London
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 commuted to their work by cycle, and the figure rose to more than 106 thousand in 2011, an increase of 144%.
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, Outer
London
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 took second place
as
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with
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 the biggest
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numbers
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number
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 of cyclists in the UK, with about 45%,
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 the lowest of the twelve
areas
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 shown in the table.
However
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, Brighton and Hove were the second highest percentage change increase (109%), after Inner
London
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, in the
numbers
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 of
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apply
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residents cycling to work, but Bristol was the UK’s second city in terms of total
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 of cycling commuters, with 8,108 in 2001 and 15,786 in 2011. Figures for the other eight
areas
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 were below
10
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the 10
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 thousand mark in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, areas, london with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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