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Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person You should write at least 150 words.

#newspaper #award #people #community #editor #someone #person
To newspaper, I'm reading your offer about a prize for people who made a great effect on our society. As you know, architecture from the soft power that gives and
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 a special image for each city, So,
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 suggest my teacher Abdulkadir Alswidanm and
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 is a lecturer at Imam Abdulrahman University in the architecture department, he designed many urban sculptures related to our
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such
 as The Flag, The horse, and The story of a king. These sculptures divide
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 two categories,
First,
Roundabout in
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 category there is a famous sculpture
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called Obeaya
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 of King Abdulaziz the founder,
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designed it in a creative way that makes an optical illusion to the driver and
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that
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small
horses
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 are running around in a circular path. And, in the second
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 there is The story of the king that abstract the Riyadh tail, as an architectural form. So,
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 suggest creating an award and calling The Architect of Motherland. Thank you for your consideration. Best Regard, Rasim Ali.
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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