Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

however
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totally disagree with that notion as the
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the
major reason for their accomplishments. on
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hand, enormous
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people
are
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believe
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luck
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them that the future will come by
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lunch
. so, the
person
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any
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plans.
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because
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the way. I
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really totally wrong notions and the
person
should eliminate that
luch
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lunch
draws the
person
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future
.
on the other hand
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totally believe that
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humans
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efforts
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itself
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the main reason for achieving dreams. because when the
person
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tries
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to improve his
selfe
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self
by learning new skills and
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working
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hard for many hours.
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, he will be
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a reward
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. after
that
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he may get
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good
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opportunities
which can allow him to
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achieve
his aims.
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Furthermore
the
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who are worked and
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are educated
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extremely are never
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equal
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with
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the persons who thought that their
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will
fulfille
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fulfil
fulfilled
the
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aims.
for
instance
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a
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two friends of mine
one
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for 18 years to engaged
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medicine university which he dreamed
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and the other
one
he
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on his thoughts that his
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good future. so
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he
had
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decided to
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study at all.
eventually
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the first
one
began a
successfull
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successful
doctorm
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doctor
doctors
while
the other
person
worked as
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a waiter
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in
restaurant
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the restaurant
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which is doesn't his
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.
to conclude
,
i
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would say that
luck
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the
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negativelly
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negatively
to destroy
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society.
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  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
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