Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

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them that the future will come by
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lunch
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really totally wrong notions and the
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should eliminate that
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lunch
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future
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totally believe that
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humans
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the main reason for achieving dreams. because when the
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to improve his
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hard for many hours.
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. after
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he may get
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good
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who are worked and
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extremely are never
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the persons who thought that their
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aims.
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two friends of mine
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for 18 years to engaged
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medicine university which he dreamed
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on his thoughts that his
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decided to
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study at all.
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began a
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successful
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doctor
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worked as
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which is doesn't his
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would say that
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negativelly
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negatively
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society.
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