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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to take time off work give details of the amount of time you need suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Sir My name is Nam Nguyen and I am the
emploee
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employee
 of Happy Dragon Technology Company. I am very happy to work under your
intructions
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instructions
 and I have been working here for over ten years. I am writing
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 letter to ask
your
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 help because my son had
very
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illness
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 and right now he is in
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hospital. My wife
do
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 not have time to take care of him the whole day.
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 why she
ask
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 me to take some
times
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 off work
go
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 to the hospital to take care of him. Can I ask
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 hours off in the afternoon, from 5pm until 7pm
.
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 I want to use
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 time to be with my son and take care of him.
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 of the quality of my work
less
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, I will spend more energy
to finish
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 my job before 5 pm. I hope everything
all
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 right and my son can recover soon so that I can
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continue
 to support the company. Best
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regarding
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 Nam Nguyen
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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