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The development of technology has resulted in more employees working from home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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At present, technological advancements and tools have been growing rapidly at an unprecedented rate supporting the global
economy
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 in many ways.
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, flexible
work
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 arrangements are in place for employees to
work
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 from anywhere, anytime not compromising their productivity. So, I would like to discuss
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the plethora of benefits of working from home.
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, the cutting –edge technological development and tools have helped
the
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companies and industries to run even during the hardest hit endemic in 2020
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 the outbreak of coronavirus.
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, Singapore companies and offices were operating from their respective houses in order for the
economy
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 to run. The government made sure there is
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stable internet connectivity at houses too.
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, many families were able to take care of their houses and feed their children despite
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the unforeseen crisis.
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,
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work from home
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 arrangements paved
way
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 for female employees to secure an opportunity to
work
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as well as
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 to take care of their young ones.
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, the female unemployment rate has dropped in many countries and
this
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 serves as a boost to the global
economy
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.
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, a significant number of teachers in Tamilnadu, India had tapped
onto
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 online platforms
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, zoom for conducting lessons. The female teachers in
such
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 schools were grateful for
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arrangement
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, as they were able to teach their class students
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 their own children. To recapitulate, there are more benefits arising from technological advancement and the flexibility allows for creativity and increased productivity leading to
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sustained positive growth in the
economy
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 and community.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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